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 == Links ==
-*See also [http://www.aegidian.org/bb/viewtopic.php?f=11&t=21097 Hermit] for Stranger's other piece about asteroid mining in the Usanat system
+*See also [https://bb.oolite.space/viewtopic.php?f=11&t=21097 Hermit] for Stranger's other piece about asteroid mining in the Usanat system
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 == Inflexible by [[User:Stranger|Stranger]] (2014, 2020) ==
-  ''Note that the descriptions of suns and planets are derived from the [[Strangers World]] suite of OXPs.''
+  ''Note that the descriptions of suns and planets are derived from the [[Strangers World]] suite of OXPs, with the [[Galactic Navy OXP]] added into the mix.''
 === Chapter 1 ===
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 == Translator's note ==
 Based on Stranger's pdf of Непреклонная - the above is down to the halfway break of p.21 (of 59). Translated using [https://translate.google.com/ Google Translate] and then edited to make more sense (I hope!). See [[Language]] for links to the Russian download.
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-[[File:Sector1 The Devils Triangle RegionMap.png|right|thumb|400px|Devil's Triangle Region (in green)]]
+[[File:Sector1 The Devils Triangle RegionMap.png|right|thumb|400px|Map of Sector 1 - showing the "Devil's Triangle" region in green]]
 [[Image:Retila (Makandal).jpg|right|400px|thumb|Makandal's picture of Retila]]
 == Inflexible by [[User:Stranger|Stranger]] (2014, 2020) ==
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 === Chapter 6 ===
-It had been a long time ago. Almost six months ago. Yes, almost six months. But what's the difference? Time did not matter here. It was still nowhere to put him. (''Not too sure what is meant here!'')
+It had been a long time ago. Almost six months ago. Yes, almost six months. But what's the difference? Time did not matter here. There was still nothing to do with it.
-She diligently performed her duties. Diligently conducted business correspondence with the clientele. Creatively worked on the image of the company. She inseparably accompanied the boss on business trips and patiently pleased him in moments of leisure. Fortunately, the ruler of the slave trade empire was not endowed with rich sexual fantasies. Perhaps in his best years her master and lord had compared a lack of imagination with healthy animal energy, but those best times were clearly far behind. Grace's former friend from that life had experience of intimate relations with an important person from the board of a large corporation. And perhaps in other circumstances it would have been amusing to confidentially exchange details, in no case intended for the ears of men. Especially men who ... well, of course.
+She diligently performed her duties. Diligently conducted business correspondence with the clientele. Creatively worked on the image of the company. She inseparably accompanied the boss on business trips and patiently pleased him in moments of leisure. Fortunately, the ruler of the slave-trade empire was not endowed with rich sexual fantasies. Perhaps in his best years her master and lord had compared a lack of imagination with healthy animal energy, but those best times were clearly far behind. Grace's former friend from that sort of life had had experience of intimate relations with an important person from the board of a large corporation. And perhaps in other circumstances it would have been amusing to confidentially exchange details, in no case intended for the ears of men. Especially men who ... well, of course.
-Well, Grace honestly tried to convince herself that everything could turn out to be much worse. And at times she almost succeeded. She reconciled herself to her lot, just as she had reconciled with loneliness before.
+Well, Grace honestly tried to convince herself that everything could have turned out to be much worse. And at times she almost succeeded. She reconciled herself to her lot, just as she had reconciled with loneliness before.
 She did not have a rich father who could raise a ransom for her, and then pay for an assassin who could pick off a slave-trader anywhere, in any smelly hole of all the eight sectors. She did not have a man who would dare hunt after her in these murderous lands. There had never been. And I would have been - I would never let go alone on this crazy journey. She had been a nameless cog in her corporation, and she has long been annoying to the costs of unscheduled circumstances, but without much damage was replaced by another cog. And they closed the matter. (''Not too sure what is meant here!'')
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 Emil.
-This whip-hand was afraid to paw the property of his boss. But did not miss the chance for a heart to heart conversation.
+This whip-hand was afraid to paw the property of his boss. But did not miss the chance for a heart-to-heart conversation.
 “Are you offended, Grace?” - he once said, it seemed as if by accident. “Well, think for yourself, have you been truly free in your own world? Have you ever heard of how a woman has to make her career?" He paused, meaningfully.
-“He is a great man, Grace. One of those elect few who really rule the world. Being next to him is a great honor. And a great responsibility. He is extremely important. He only allows a few close to himself. And those who did not justify his trust - well, you know, I do not envy them.
+“He is a great man, Grace. One of those elect few who really rule the world. Being next to him is a great honor. And a great responsibility. He is extremely important. He only allows a few close to himself. And those who did not justify his trust - well, you know, I do not envy them."
 Bastard.

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 == Inflexible by [[User:Stranger|Stranger]] (2014, 2020) ==
-  ''Note that the descriptions of suns and planets match those in the [[Strangers World]] suite of OXPs.''
+  ''Note that the descriptions of suns and planets are derived from the [[Strangers World]] suite of OXPs.''
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 Bastard.
 == Translator's note ==

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 - “You guessed, Grace.” - Emil gallantly supported her arm on the ladder. - "We are heading along the shortest and safest path. I hope you are not disappointed?"
-Trudn (''Not too sure what is meant here!'') soared into the night sky. A scattering of the lights of the gigalropolis on the view screen was replaced by the inky darkness of the sea. The girl’s heart was beating anxiously.
+The Trident Executive Shuttle soared into the night sky. A scattering of the lights of the gigalropolis on the view screen was replaced by the inky darkness of the sea. The girl’s heart was beating anxiously.
 No. This was unrealistic.
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 Grace felt like a little frightened girl, not ready for change. She wanted to return home, to the usual loneliness.
-The scoreboard (''Not too sure what is meant here!'') in the cabin went out - the Trun (''Trudn?'') was entering into orbit. Emil went to the bar’s rack and took out a bottle of champagne. Then he was next to Grace.
+The scoreboard (''Not too sure what is meant here!'') in the cabin went out - the Trident was entering into orbit. Emil went to the bar’s rack and took out a bottle of champagne. Then he was next to Grace.
 - "It’s scary to leave the house, I know. But believe me, Grace - only by looking from the angle where you can fully evaluate what you possessed."
 Their glasses touched with a ringing sound.
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 “I suppose Grace, you are unlikely to forget this day.” - Emil remarked behind her. “This is the end of your former life.” The world outside of Zadies is not quite the same as you supposed from the holostim programmes of [[GNN]]. Welcome to reality.
 Cold metal touched her neck.
 == Translator's note ==
-Based on Stranger's pdf of Непреклонная - the above is down to the break at the bottom of p.11. Translated using [https://translate.google.com/ Google Translate] and then edited to make more sense (I hope!). See [[Language]] for links to the Russian download.
+Based on Stranger's pdf of Непреклонная - the above is down to the break at the top third of p.13. Translated using [https://translate.google.com/ Google Translate] and then edited to make more sense (I hope!). See [[Language]] for links to the Russian download.
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 [[File:Zadies_(FPO).png|thumb|300px|right|Zadies - from Stranger's [[Famous Planets Overhaul (FPO)]] ]]
 === Chapter 3 ===
-Grace Wilson in her life did not think about such terrible things as piracy and the slave trade. It’s not that she was impenetrably stupid or that she was soulless - just that these things lay far abroad of her life experience. [[Sector1/Zadies|Zadies]], where Grace was born and had lived thirty years of her conscious life, wears the boastful title of being the center of the first sector - in ''this'' system lies the headquarters of the galactic community, GalCop. Zadies cannot be counted amongst the flagship systems of technological progress, but this rich industrial system of the ninth level is located on the transgalactic highway, connecting the Old Worlds in the southwest of the first sector with the worlds of Pulsar in the northeast. Almost all major transport companies and travel agencies have their representative offices on Zadies. Business activity on the planet is concentrated within the huge, but quite tolerable gigalropolis, which covers the inner sea - the pool of the ancient shock crater. Outside of this randomly built-up anthill, picturesque pastoral landscapes stretch outwards, over which the friendly stars beckoning one to come and visit shine down at night.
+Grace Wilson did not think about such terrible things as piracy and the slave trade. It’s not that she was impenetrably stupid or that she was soulless - just that these things lay far distant from her life experience. [[Sector1/Zadies|Zadies]], where Grace was born and had lived thirty years of her conscious life, carries the boastful title of being the center of the first sector - in ''this'' system lies the headquarters of the galactic community, GalCop. Zadies cannot be counted amongst the flagship systems of technological progress, but this rich industrial system of the ninth level is located on the transgalactic highway, connecting the Old Worlds in the southwest of the first sector with the Pulsar Worlds in the northeast. Almost all major transport companies and travel agencies have their representative offices on Zadies. Business activity on the planet is concentrated within the huge, but quite tolerable gigalropolis, which covers the inner sea - the pool of the ancient shock crater. Outside of this randomly built-up anthill, picturesque pastoral landscapes stretch outwards, over which the friendly stars beckoning one to come and visit shine down at night.
 Grace was not a convinced homebody, but her travel experience was limited to tourist trips to the neighboring systems of [[Sector1/Anarlaqu|Anarlaqu]] and [[Sector1/Esusti|Esusti], and those during a period of romantic relations with a former suitor. Grace had seen a live ocean with xeno-coral in Anarlaqu, but had had a chance to see the most famous forests of hundred-meter cacti of Esusti only from the air-conditioned saloon of a tourist flitter. The climate on  Esusti was sultry and her boyfriend, like most tourists, preferred to spend time in cool bars - and not on open-air exhausting walks. Since then, Grace was accustomed not to demand too much from life and sincerely rejoice with every little thing. One of these trifles occupied a place of honour in her kitchen. The latest generation food-blender - with artificial intelligence. This snow-white handsome equipment had come to her as a prize for winning a quiz. And not in any quiz for fans of a series. Grace was an educated girl and sometimes spent evenings reading historical literature. So the question had been, 'what was  the ship of generations called which had delivered the first colonists to the Lave', and it did not take her by surprise. But a blender was nothing in comparison with what had happened this morning. Grace again - once again - mentally recalled those moments. The girl's heart sank sweetly.
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 Grace shook her head in confusion.
-Xexedi. Famous throughout the eight sectors, a futuristic city-world, covering the entire planet. The world where representatives of all the reasonable races of the Commonwealth are visiting and working. The world where the future is born.
+[[Sector1/Xexedi|Xexedi]]. Famous throughout the eight sectors, a futuristic city-world, covering the entire planet. The world where representatives of all the reasonable races of the Commonwealth are visiting and working. The world where the future is born.
 But this is impossible. No. It is insanely expensive.
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 Grace was not opposed. Why not pass the time on the road for a conversation?
-The miracles of the day were endless. Grace turned to join a long queue for the passenger's registration consoles. And then to wait for the announcement of the start of boarding for the orbital shuttle, which would deliver them to the liner - it would probably be a 'Yellow Arrow'. The usual terminal bustle is exciting, but tiring. However, Emil confidently went to the VIP passenger zone.
+The miracles of the day were endless. Grace turned to join a long queue for the passenger's registration consoles. And then to wait for the announcement of the start of boarding for the orbital shuttle, which would deliver them to the liner - it would probably be a [[Famous Planets Liners OXP|Yellow Arrow]]. The usual terminal bustle is exciting, but tiring. However, Emil confidently went to the VIP passenger zone.
 The formalities took away the minimum of time. The employee behind the counter was too well-trained to show even a hint of interest or surprise - nothing but polite attention.